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The sight of cherry blossoms,
So rich & pink,
A symbol of clouds.
Here's another haiku I rote about Spring. Enjoy.
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greenbank Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013

The definition of a haiku is that it contains 5 syllables in the first line, 7 syllables in the second line, and 5 syllables in the third line.

 

the sight of cherry

blossoms such a tender pink

a symbol of clouds

 

One might go further and, being aware that the fluffy firm clouds of Spring days are in fact usually white, extend the metaphor a little (the word "symbol" is, I feel a little unnecessary here):

 

the sight of cherry

blossoms such a tender pink

the dawn clouds of Spring

 

And I find your authorial comment interesting. Presumably you are referring to the "rites of Spring" when you create the hapax legomenon "rote" as the past tense of a notional verb "rite" (formed on the noun).

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HachimakiX23 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Fanx 4 your opinion. I'm still a novice when it cums 2 writin haikus n I've only really got in2 haiku poetry 4 a few months, but I'm still tryin my best. Have a look at sum of my other haikus on my page if u got time.
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